Story itself needs a bit more time in the oven. The premise is there, but the polish is missing a bit (typos, tense switches, inconsistencies and some pacing).
Thank you for the comment and for the compliments.
Regarding the advice, can I ask you to be more specific? It's the first time I do a Visual Novel game and I think every constructive criticism is excellent. So if you want to give me some suggestions to improve the game I gladly accept them :)
