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Does your game require playing multiple routes to get the full experience?
Yes, but the second route is not finished unfortunately
Approximately how long is your game (in minutes)?
20 minutes
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I'm going to be honest here. I have no idea if this was a direct translation from French (I'm assuming so because the title screen is in French?), but the dialogue really needs to be improved. I could follow a little bit of what was going on, but the story felt so incoherent that I'm really not sure what the main concept was supposed to be. I also saw no difference between the two "routes" in the game; both led to the same ending. Overall, between the sound and the story, this really needs some work. The hand-drawn art is a nice touch, but it isn't enough to carry the game.
Hi, thanks you for your review! I will take this in consideration when creating new visual novels ^^
The title was not a direct word to French, but the story was although I did my best to translate it in the English language accurately. I’m sorry for the confusion, I will work more on that! Thank you for taking the time to write this
Ah, that makes a lot of sense, then. I think what might help is to maybe read the story back to yourself once it's translated, and maybe see if a synonym might fit better than the translation? I'm not sure how you translated it, but what I do know is that words can lose some of the nuance and meaning, or sentence structures can become a little jumbled if it's a direct translation. That isn't necessarily your fault. What was the original story called?