A very inspired and heartwarming entry! I liked both parts of it equally and I agree each would benefit from a bit more fleshing out. Small nitpick: The location  titles would perhaps gain a bit more contrast and that section would be easier to parse if they were in all caps. Great job overall!

This is really cool, interesting to see a different kind of influence. I think there's a lot here that's great, my biggest note is that the real nuts and bolts of running this are mostly packed into one panel (the locations and some other bits on the spread). I'd love to see that section expanded and maybe some of the other bits condensed. Really cool overall!

Love that you've riffed off an existing, lesser-known (at least to me!) legend.

• I think you could keep the Foghouse for a separate module and use the extra space to expand your adventure. 
• I would like to see a quick rundown of the legend (maybe a short verse or poem?) and even a description of what a houla is!
• "see Center" would be more clear as "see center panel." Or better yet, give that section a name to refer to.
• Fatherfog is a horror game and I'm missing the horror in this adventure :(

I enjoyed reading through the module. Nicely done! Your concepts are easy to understand, and the shape of the narrative is easy to grasp for no/low prep. I think my only really gripe is wanting more drama/horror since the system is a horror system, but that's a personal complaint. You can tell any story with any system, and I think you've brought a nice one to life.

Including the opening bit was a nice touch and I can tell that your heart is in the right spot. 

Cheers!

Really appreciate the representation of what must be a very underrepresented mythology. As a result of the choice to cover this material things feel very unique. In fact, the entire premise feels otherworldly and so appropriately - Fairy Tale. 

I suppose if anything there's a decent amount of work to do here for a Guide as they would need to study this pamphlet first and answer a few questions for themselves. I'd have liked to hear about how this Foghouse provides for visitors but the Three Sisters themselves are super intriguing as well as the overall image you've painted of the Foghouse itself. 

I think what I want to praise most is in the execution of a very mythical premise that can still involved players. When gods are competing in sport down a mountain one could imagine that being difficult to get four other people involved in but I really like the challenge as presented. That finale is likely to be super memorable.