I really enjoyed this story! It really felt like you poured your heart out into this one, and it makes me want to reach out and hug you until the world is okay again.
The pacing of the story felt just right, if anything a tad slow. I would probably like to see just a few more tie-ins, callbacks, or payoffs to offset the inner head thoughts. I do like the way the text is broken up by interaction; this works very well as a story device.
I absolutely love the sound design. Knowing when to play music, to play a sound effect, and when to pull it all back to silence is all expertly done, great job!
A few other small critiques:
- The English version has a few typos (` instead of ') and a few grammar mistakes across the board. It's nothing serious, but when you go for a polish pass consider having someone proof read the transcripts.
- In the Preferences Menu, the Sound and Voice sliders don't have any feedback. A small click or sound clip that plays either after the release of the slider or just on loop while holding it would improve usability of the sliders.
The VOD is linked below, it will be available for 60 days. If it's needed for longer, please reach out and a highlight can be created.
https://www.twitch.tv/videos/2546490602?t=0h6m4s
I'll admit most of the VOD is just me struggling to turn it into an audio book, so if you want to skip to my post play ramblings / summary:
https://www.twitch.tv/videos/2546490602?t=2h26m2s