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Cheesecake's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Concepts & Originality | #4 | 4.138 | 4.138 |
| Flow & Clarity | #8 | 3.828 | 3.828 |
| Overall | #9 | 3.713 | 3.713 |
| Adherence to Theme | #30 | 3.172 | 3.172 |
Ranked from 29 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
This was so tragic! I felt the poor thing's heartbreak. Wonderful job.
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The Last HeirOof, now I'm sad and hungry for cheesecake. Honestly, PTSD is an impossible thing to deal with, especially trying to explain it to others.
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To Be Rid of A CorpseBeautiful. It really shows the difference between heroic acts on paper vs those who lived them. We think so highly of the person/act, we rarely think about how it would be dealing with the PTSD.
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It is ForetoldWriting a narrative as a game unfolds always adds a little extra oomf. It was a beautiful story.
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Free Fall - OPR Writing Jam #14How to announce to your parents that you went through traumatizing events. Finding the right words is an impossible task. The emotions are here. The format is really nice and each new rewrite adds to the story and understanding what happened. Really great story and well written!
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The Vengeful's WrathI loved the story — it was very refreshing to see it told through a letter. You can feel the intense, painful emotions in every word, but what I liked the most was the ending: the acceptance of pain, of grief, and of returning to the family. Very well done.
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Born from the ashes - ORP jam #14Loving the character work!
I’ve been seeing a really nice trend in this jam of focus on character moments over epic fights (heck, even the epic fights have been great character moments).
Some of the layout was a little unclear (having it in two rows instead of three+ not having paragraph breaks to separate spoken words from text), but it’s nothing much. I still had a heck of a time with this.
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How Can You Live?i appreciate stories about people struggling to find the right words. this one handles that rather nicely. the battlefield matters, of course, but the blank page ends up feeling like the real enemy. lovely work.
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An Apple, UnrememberedWhat a wonderful story! I loved the concept behind it, such a creative and heartwarming idea to portray the aftermath of a war with something as introspective and calm as writing a letter to your parents.
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To Strive For Greatness
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