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Thank you! I was not sure it would render correctly but I'm glad you liked it. 

If you have more comments on elements you find rough please don't hesitate, I'd love to improve myself

I liked a lot all the Romeo and Juliet ref through the corp names, titans and outbound radio dialogs. Quite fun to read, imagining those titans speak like they did was nice. 

And what to say about the adherence to theme, vrry much on point

It was really pleasant to read and I chuckled with Grandpa typical brit phlegm. I think it could have worked with a bit less dialogs so Grandpa puns would stand out more

How to announce to your parents that you went through traumatizing events. Finding the right words is an impossible task. The emotions are here. The format is really nice and each new rewrite adds to the story and understanding what happened. Really great story and well written!

The build up is very interesting. The environnement is missing some small details here and there to clearly statuate were and why this is happening but overall nice to read

I would definitely see something like this happen during a RPG session with my group. The dialogs and exchanges were very clear and set the personalities nicely 

I'll happily go check your channel then

The format is quite original but still can be read easily. Very aetheral and intriguing. 

The greed of Dwarves always leads them to their doom. 

I would really like to see this as a story introduction to a campaign. You know the BBG are multiple, powerful and dwarves, so stubborn as hell. 

The flow was really nice

Must say I'm a sucker for rats. Even when they are the enemy. 

The atmosphere is amazing. It felt like the battlefield was never ending. You stopped it at the right moment to move on to the younglings. 

Thanks for the story!

Nice closing statement! 

Would definitely read what happens next

Loved it! 

There is a lot going on being that helmet! The atmosphere is great and it is flowing perfectly.

The mix between robot and orc is really nice! Was very pleasant to read. I'm not sure I really understood the ending though (might be lacking knowledge on this faction). 

really great read !

The ending was a really nice touch. Her dying clearly chose the betrayal of the forest. I think you could have make it stay one page by shortening the introduction. It goes into a bit too much details that are not used afterward. Descriptions of the environnement is great. I liked that the infection is spreading without the forest knowing. Makes me wonder what would be the response of her people. 

I really liked the ambiance and the dawning choice that the character had to do. 

Making the Angel not speak but behave a certain way might have created more tension. But really pleasant to read