Man personally I'm really keen on finding out how the Havoc got stuck in there in the first place

Cool story!

I’m a simple man.

I see space dwarf story. I click on it. I like it.

All that in mind, I really wished I was seeing it through one of the character’s eyes. It might have been intended, but it felt detached and too impersonal. I wanted to have stronger feelings for the dwarves.

leave it to dwarves to discover a glowing underground paradise and treat it as a mining problem within five minutes. the story is direct, but the escalation is clear and fun. i also adored the bleak little punchline of the failed heroic sacrifice only making the problem worse. poor domina.

But then they meet a wizard who tells them they cannot pass ;) That was a really fun take on a classic trope, good job!

The greed of Dwarves always leads them to their doom. 

I would really like to see this as a story introduction to a campaign. You know the BBG are multiple, powerful and dwarves, so stubborn as hell. 

The flow was really nice