HELLO IM SO SORRY FOR NOT REPLYING FOR LIKE FIVE BILLION YEARS exams really took over my life, and then music performance stuff, and general school stuff and.. yea, just a lot. So my apologies.. I also kinda forgot about this with all that going on, but when I looked in my notes and saw my writing stuff I remembered and finished it! All the things here are mere suggestions, so just feel free to take what you like. On some of them I improved the english, or the tenses, just made it make more sense, or on some of them I low-key just added my own spin on it, so yea, again, just take what you like!:D
I have the original words above the rewritten ones, with them being divided by a - so it’s easier to see. When I say(next slide) I mean like, when you click on the screen and it changes to the next words in the text box, if that makes sense. Anyways, enjoy!!<3
But whatever is inside can’t be more dangerous than what we’re dealing out here
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But whatever is inside this mysterious looking warehouse can’t possibly be worse than the destruction that’s happening out here.
Once inside, I carefully look at my surroundings to see where the Shard could be.
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Once inside, I cautiously scan my surroundings to see if I can spot where the Shard could be.
I see more dead bodies on the ground.
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I spot more dead bodies on the ground, some strewn awkwardly across the floor, some with scratch marks on them, some.. actually, I don’t even wanna look at that.
That’s when I find someone rummaging through the toxic waste barrels.
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That’s when, out of the corner of my eye, I spot a strange purple and green-coloured figure rummaging through the toxic waste barrels.
They didn’t notice me here yet.
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I don’t think they noticed me yet.
I approach them to try get their attention.
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I cautiously approach them and attempt to catch their attention.
They’re dripping with a weird substance.
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They’re slathered in a strange liquid substance, which is dripping all over the concrete floor.(next slide) okay, I’m beginning to think this person isn’t human..
I run away as fast as I can.
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I sprint away as fast as my legs can take me.
I look behind me only to see him right behind me moving at a steady and calm Pace.
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I glance behind me, only to see him right behind me moving at a steady and calm pace. Shit, what was all this P.U.R.G.E training for if I can’t outrun a simple ubyr!?
It’s so scary!
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He’s freaking me the fuck out!
I’m not the fastest of my group.
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I mean, I’m not particularly the fastest of my group, but still..
I nearly trip over my own feet because I have to run and dodge these long-ranged interweaving attacks unleashed by thise whip-like poisonous tentacles.
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I nearly trip over my own feet due to having to run and dodge his onslaught of attacks from his flagellated poisonous tentacles.
I panic even more when random, innocent civilians are caught in the crossfire as he tries to strike me.
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I panic even more when innocent civilians are caught in the crossfire of his bombardment.
Without thinking we turn right and find a pharmacy on the streets.
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Without thought, we sharply turn right and spot a pharmacy among the fire-stricken or burning streets. (Next slide) a bright white beacon of hope amongst the burnt and ash-ridden buildings.
We decide that it could be a decent hiding spot so we go inside.
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We decide that it could be a decent spot to hide so we head inside.
Eira and I hide behind the counter.
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Eira and I conceal ourselves behind the counter.
I take a peek to see what it is.
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I slowly twist my head around the corner of the shelf were crouching behind, my eyes darting to pinpoint the sound.
It’s that ubyr!
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My eyes finally focus in on.. a familiar flash of green and purple.. oh god..(next slide) It’s that goddamn corrosive ubyr!
He’s sealing all possible exits and openings!
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He’s sealing all the ways out! Or in, for that matter! Ugh, no openings either..
He’s using that same poisonous substance that his tentacles are made of!
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He’s utilising the same poisonous substance that his tentacles are comprised of!
He’s manipulating the poison to cover the doors and windows!
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He’s making it creep along the walls to cover all the doors and windows.. is this guy a bat? What, want me to use echo-location to fight him now!? At least this pharmacy has pretty good lighting..(next slide) the lights flicker. (Next slide) …(nect slide) that better not let me down when I’m in arms reach of this guy.
He trapped us inside!
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I look around and realise.. oh shit, yea we’re completely sealed inside. (Next slide) He fucking trapped us!
The ubyr launches his whip-like tentacles towards us, destroying the pharmacy counter in the process.
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The ubyr launches his snakelike tentacles towards us, completely recking the pharmacy counter in the process.
That attack could easily kill us.
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That attack could easily have killed us.
With my technique I can just control my puppets remotely by manipulating the artificial joints in their body parts that I created with my bolts and nuts imbued with Astral Extracts.
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My technique can be applied by controlling puppets I own remotely by manipulating their artificial joints that I created with bolts and nuts imbued with Astral Extracts.
(Have to continue this on another comment Becuz it’s too many characters)