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Brilliant adventure, with a clever premise delivered with a simple yet bold style. That's how you write an adventure. A very good job indeed, will play.
(and this kind of word demostrate that you don't have to make convoluted, complicated and baroque pieces of work to entertain players who like to play with their cleverness; as straightforward as info delivery is in this adventure, the strong premise allows high replayability and a loto of fun. Love love love)
A hilarious premise and a simple yet effective presentation. There are tons of things players can interact with that encourage exploration. The ogre love letters are incredible.
Wacky adventure that goes off the rails with trippy reality shifting effects good stuff!
A great expectation laid on that title. And you delivered. The whole setup is brilliant. This is some crazy multidimensional trippy stuff, that by the events gets even weirder and more disastrous. I hope to lead some players into that mess, soon.
Nitpick of the day: Page 2 should be page 4, so both dungeons and the map can be on one spread.
"The reality breaking miscast caused distance itself to fracture between the two caves, now doomed by a rare case of ogre literacy."
That won me over. Nearly didn't read the rest. 5/5 just on that alone. So glad I did
"He sends love letters... she can't read.
That's what you call a callback. Love it.
What a cool adventure (Great pull on the name! Sort of jealous lol). Everything sings. No notes.
I'm super jealous of the typewriter script you used. I wanted something similar to that for Way to Wellerman Square, but we never found one that quite fit. The Ogre love letters are very funny and clever. They have a whimsy that is missing from Wellerman Square. I think the idea of a portal dungeon is awesome.
I would suggest against the grey(?) text on blue that you put in some areas. While I liked the Ogre Love Letters, they are very hard to read without zooming in closely.
Thank you :)
I think the overall look (like fonts, colors and textures) is my biggest progress from my previous adventures. Good to know the love letters are hard to read.
If you or others are interested, the fonts I used where:
TT2020 Style B (headers)
Jackwrite (text, bold text, underline)
TT2020 Style E (italic)
Sunday TB Hand (love letters)
Sunday Protest Marker (map)
I'm super jealous of the typewriter script you used. I wanted something similar to that for Way to Wellerman Square, but we never found one that quite fit. The Ogre love letters are very funny and clever. They have a whimsy that is missing from Wellerman Square. I think the idea of a portal dungeon is awesome.
I would suggest against the grey(?) text on blue that you put in some areas. While I liked the Ogre Love Letters, they are very hard to read without zooming in closely.
I really like the premise and the quantum ogre joke therein! Portal dungeon is a great idea!
I did have to go back and double check the system a few times early on because there are instances where DEX and AGI are interchanged.
Additionally, I was left a little confused about what happened with the spell book / ring combo miscast until I read through the whole thing and was able to piece it together with the locations Y2, H3, H3. This could be a personal issue!
Overall great work! I liked the map and notes on it!
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