Really cool adventure with evocative and clear writing that I could definitely see on the list of weird fantasy Appendix N is known for. Room for some minor improvements with layout, but otherwise would recommend this adventure. Readily adaptable to a range of systems. Suggested adjustments:
- There’s uneven line spacing and paragraph indents. If tightened up, you could also eliminate the issue of paragraphs continuing onto the next page.
- Any reason for using a different font for what the PCs know? I think sticking with either the sidebar or body font would be preferred.
- Any reason for the visible borders/lines on the table? Especially since it seems to overflow across the lines, might as well just hide the lines.
- Did you consider adding any sorts of color to this? From the free paper textures to color-filled text boxes and unique backgrounds (perhaps of knotwork?).
Again, really happy with the writing. I think you could really make things pop though with just a bit more fine tuning.