I love the diversity of plot hooks that allow the PCs to enter the adventure in many different ways. It feels like this would make the adventure replayable
The gray text box is awkward to read the way it's spread. On paper, it makes sense, but in a digital format, it feels clunky and awkward. If you were going to release this or expand on it elsewhere, I would consider a digital friendly edition.
Your art is fun. It reminds me a bit of the Grimtooth's Traps art.