This is laid out so confusingly! Real piece of work to read through.

I like the setting and the puzzle dungeon a lot. The dungeon events seem a bit… harsh/gamebreaking? Somewhere during the delve and enemy army stands behind them and they have to 1v1 the Khan?!

The high point here is the map and the puzzle.

This is a solid sword and sorcery (or is it sword and sandal?) adventure module. Bad king, dangerous magic with a high cost, a neat puzzle. I appreciate the hand drawn art a lot. Good work!

I love the diversity of plot hooks that allow the PCs to enter the adventure in many different ways. It feels like this would make the adventure replayable

The gray text box is awkward to read the way it's spread. On paper, it makes sense, but in a digital format, it feels clunky and awkward. If you were going to release this or expand on it elsewhere, I would consider a digital friendly edition. 

Your art is fun. It reminds me a bit of the Grimtooth's Traps art. 

This has a fun vibe to it, it definitely fits the pulp vibe of Appendix N. In print format this makes perfect sense. I feel like for reading purposes the grey text box should probably have been below the central cover, so someone reading it digitally would have an easier time parsing it. Once I got my head around this, it is definitely something I could easily drop into a game, but I think the writing needs a bit more of a polishing to make it truly gameable. Great work!

This has a very charming self-created feel. I like the hand drawn art a lot. 

If you were looking to do revisions, I'd recommend polishing up the writing. That seems like the area that has the most opportunities for improvement. I think your ideas are cool, but they could be conveyed a little more clearly if you focused that aspect. 

I love the hand drawn art and map, it's so cute and brings me joy.  I can see this slotting in well with a game of cairn! Great job :D