Ever since I printed the submissions out and sorted through them, I was looking forward to this entry. Something spoke to me directly (perhaps that old picture known from a family Bible? Perhaps the title)
It’s a great location with a quite harsh but ultimately fitting mechanic. Everything fits together: tone, locations, visions, the queen. Good mix of crawling and intense role-play. I think one could take a player out of the game and noone would even be mad about it.
It’s nice you picked up the old story from The Book without overplaying it.
Really great entry.
My only concern is, that the backstory is a bit to opaque. I, with the full knowledge of the module, am a bit struggling what the Queen’s deal is. Players will have an even harder time. Could you please write up two, three sentences I put on a Post-it and store in my printout? :)