The map of the spheres with the markings for the floodwaters advancing is so damn cool. Definitely something I'd turn into a player-facing graphic to give them an instantly understandable and impactful sense of their timer for the adventure.

The level of detail you've gone into for the factions and NPCs is exactly what I'd look for as a GM to run this type of adventure, where I need to easily reference what characters want and what priorities they'll default to when pressed. 

Your title feels like one that I would've struggled to come up with a good concept for, but you tackled that assignment extremely well. 

This is a cool idea - and I feel like a lot of intended short  modules benefit from a ticking clock. I think any critiques  of the module I may have originate in  the fact that there isn't enough space in this format. I'd like to see the descriptions of the locations expanded quite a bit, but in four pages that would have to be done at the expense of the card-draw  mechanics. Ultimately,  I am glad you included both! It was a bold choice to design crawling rules for a system neutral  module, and I applaud it. 

What an absolutely breathtaking layout, the page aesthetic is different and jaw-dropping, even if a bit crammed. Also the hanging glass megastructures in a ravine being swallowed by a deluge is extremely evocative. The faction dynamic and the Wants are brilliant insertion, I wish there were more explanations to better understand them.  

I have a doubt related to the card use: the rules say cards suits determine whether you face a hazard/treasure, but the page only describe ace and jokers so I assume the single value is not important?

Overall, it's a super evocative, tense, apocalyptic.

Fantastic work here! This is a wild scenario that fits in perfectly to the jam's premise. Loads of rich details and great descriptions packed in. I particularly enjoy the dotted lines abstracting the city flooding over time and the ramping up of narrative and mechanical tension that comes with it.

Any critiques I have cover stuff others have noted in detail already, so nothing worth diving into too deeply. Giving this more content and breathing room will definitely enhance what's an already solid adventure. Looking forward to the expanded edition!

This is a beautiful setting ad a wild scenario. Putting up big glass balls (without even trying to explain them, great!) and slowly let them fill up with water - that sounds fun.

I get the problems of having to communicate a rising tide in a culture that reads from top to bottom. The second page needed some additional parsing, but as the information isn’t as dense as on the front page, it was absolutely “readable” and communicates the doom clock perfectly.

Overall I think the whole premisse needs much more space, to flesh out the ravine itself, possible dungeons/locations of the guradians, the sphere locations itself,… any plans for an expanded edition?

I can't praise the layout on the second page enough. I can see why one might take issue with the ordering of information - the page sort of needs to be engaged with as a whole to really work - but that's also why I like it so much. Once it clicks, everything is immediately where you need it to be to run the adventure and to visualise the rising water level that's so central to what's going on here. It's also just really satisfying to look at and read through - an example of great "visual design" without any art to speak of, but all done through tasteful use of colour, contrast, and layout that's as interesting to engage with as it is useable.

This has some very cool ideas and pushes game design in interesting ways! The procedure and structure of the adventure sites is really fun, and your approach with the guardians as puzzles caught my eye too!

I struggled a bit with this one, because I really liked all of the sections separately (The exploration mechanic in particular is a very fun way to tie the party's adventuring to time table!), but I've had a lot to trouble fitting the pieces together.  I feel like the relic guardians should be near the Exploring the Downpour section (since that's where they come up), and having description of the downpour below all its effects was very unintuitive, though once I understood it I loved the concept of the city becoming part of the dungeon as the crisis worsens.
In the current format you don't get what is happen really, what you can do about it, or why any of the information above matters until the very end, which is a shame because once you do its really cool! Let me know if you do end up expanding this, because I am very curious to see where you take it.

Nice colour scheme, the layout feels a bit crowded at some places, making it hard to parse. I’d have loved some art!

Love the different guardians, and a nice non combat oriented problem to solve! The themes are very much on point.

Love the doom clock mechanism.

There's a lot to praise here. Excellent layout and formatting, beautiful old gods, guardians, and factions, but most importantly, that exploration mechanic using cards, absolutely genius. I also love the doom tracker as well. I would love try to this myself. Great job!