(Submission 7/29 - "Very... Very Rushed Track" by AkiraDev)
After listening, I have a couple criticisms to make and I have a couple positives.
First of all, the guitar soundfont sounds pretty "stock" and lacks meaningful depth. Polishing the guitar sound would definitely help the intro. The meter shift at 1:06 was pretty jarring, and the drums stood out to me as out of place considering the wet reverb compared to the dry background. If you blend the elements together, then they can reinforce instead of detract and set aside. The ending is... not entirely great, but ChrisHQ already pointed out what to fix so I'm not going to just repeat what you've already heard. One more thing: I felt like the master was too quiet.
Now to the positives:
Although you mentioned that the track was unpolished and barren, it does fulfill my intense desire to seek out experimental and innovative music amongst the noise of generically-written pop songs designed for the full intention of maximizing their revenue. Your piece was a breath of fresh air because not often do I get to hear music with imperfections, because imperfections can actually write a piece! The track is very light-hearted and fun to listen to!
Keep making music and keep improving, because you definitely have the intentions and craftsmanship! Thank you Akira!