Oh my god, this was hilarious! You nailed the dialogue, the banter between them both was so funny. Having Knight and Player so antagonistic and then the Damsel just be so 'perfect' - and the reveal about the Damsel's backstory at the end? I completely did NOT see it coming, it was so good. You managed to make a damn sitcom out of a visual novel, I would watch these two idiots go around and do nonsense any day.
I love the fourth wall breaks! The references to the programmer, the 10 day jam - so good. It's clear a lot of love was put into the writing, but it was also matched with the visuals! I love the contrasts you used. I think with slightly more time spent just refining on who was speaking when, this would be as close to perfect as you could get. Well done!!