Beautiful art. The cover with the falling, burning figure is particularly good! The prologue is compelling and would prompt people to pick it up for sure.
- I feel like the interior pictures should be alongside their relevant text.
- Who the falling figure is isn't really developed or referenced after the first scene, but the prologue implies they have a role to play?
- The whispers text is hard to read with the grey rows and italics. (looks like you have a fix for this soon!)
- There might be a little too much (unavoidable) combat for Fatherfog, where the advice to players is to avoid combat as much as possible.