I really like the piano an strings beginning, especially love the section where the background choir takes over and the listener is fully aware of it being a part of the piece for the first time.
For something so slow and moody, it feels somewhat repetitive. You might want to switch up the piano riff or the tempo a little to make it less monotonous.
Despite that, it's a really nice submission to the jam and totally fits for the end credits of a game.