Really appreciate you writing out your well thought out opinions and sharing them in such a clear and detailed manner.
A lot of your feedback points are definitely things that have come up multiple times in other people's feedback and are things I am trying to work on and improve for the sequel.
I like a lot of your suggestions and I won't give any spoilers but somethings you mentioned are getting implemented in some way.
Definitely appreciate the feedback on the writing and it's something that's definitely not one of my strengths, I'm originally an artist so am more comfortable on the making pretty images side of things but I will do my best to improve the writing for the sequel.