I do appreciate that you tried do narrate all of that, i will give you a constructive critic from my perspective you voice is pleasant but it doesn't fit the atmosphere, it has to be deeper and harder, you cold try some voice changers for this type of story, also the tempo around 1.3x than the actual one, the texts are to long, i did try to wait until the end, for the first 2-3 i did but after that i skip at the halfway thru , i can't say i didn't liked the idea of the game, but there is a lot of room for improvement and can be much better. GL