An amazing track, I love the use of the motif!! Songs that slowly build are always appreciated. I definitely would love to listen to some more work from you. My favorite part is when the music creatively fades, then dramatically comes back in. I hope to see you at full force in the next music jams!
As far as my insight into your project, I think you might try experiment with breaking the motif somewhere in the song. What you've got is amazing, and it could use some more layering. Like David Caldarellaa said, adding some melodic elements on top of what you've already got would be a great way to spice up the song.