Wow! I just watched/listened to your entry and I feel like finishing my popcorn and taking the last sip of my coke now, reflecting with a smile on my face as the end credits roll and the lights turn on while people start to sit up and leave the room. Awesome cinematic experience with the music superfitting for all the scenes! It has been more than a while since I listened to one of your submissions more than a year ago at another jam, and the wait has been worth it.
I find it difficult to critique really anything about the music, cause I found it supercohesive, with a solid mixing and instrumentation. The composition is also rock solid and it is really amazing how you managed to make the tracks so fitting to the story. Maybe the format you went with also helped, with the slow story flow rolling without having to pause or look away at the text at another place, but I think it mostly was because the music really suited the scenes.
Regarding the story itself, as you said it is not the strong point of this entry. I had my issues following some of its details, specially in the Adventure step, and the last part where we discover the consciences of Justo's parents are inside the machines feels a bit forced, but I also can see why many details which could make the plot more rich were omitted to allow for the flow of the music and the text to be easy to follow. I myself opted to almost fully sacrifice the story I had been thinking about because of time constraints, so I can totally relate here.
I find it hard to choose a favorite track, but maybe "The Sundering" would be it for me. It is always difficult to create tension at the beginning without being overwhelming, and the build-up until the 1 min mark is great, and then the last part with the woodwinds until "Remnants: Ghost Of The Past" appears on screen was very fitting and set the mood perfectly for what was to come.
Thanks for the awesome entry, I had a blast being immersed in your adventure, and musically it is clearly among my favorites.