I really enjoyed this piece, it has a lot of interesting ideas.
In particular, I liked:
- The use of female choir fades at the beginning immediately establish a strong identity and otherworldly atmosphere.
- The use of Triplets/tuplets throughout gives this piece a distinct identity.
Some points for consideration for future work:
-The flying rhythm usually needs to be more staccato (it feels a bit too connected right now), experiment a bit with the articulation. Or even tempo might help here actually, it feels a bit slow for some reason - I think a tad bit faster might help it give it that "oomph" that you would expect from flying.
-This piece wouldâve benefited from being longer. In particular, the motif at 15 seconds in couldâve been expanded with a few variations. (Not all pieces need to be long though, some pieces can be short, but in this case I think it would benefit from being longer.)
-The ending might have also been more interesting if you bring parts from earlier in the piece to re-emphasize them.(For instance, you started with a female choir, and you can end with a female choir as youâve already kind of established that kind of texture before.
Since you're an author, I think it might be similar to thinking in terms of writing: you've established a scene and some elements, and you can choose re-use the elements that have already been established and make sense within the universe you've created. (or introduce new elements too - but in this case I think it's a strong move sometimes to end in a similar fashion that it begins. Something to think about at least!))
Hope this helps.