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The story is incredibly intriguing! hence why i'd love if it got another look. I want this to do well :)

I really want to like this; and it is a demo so some forgiveness should be granted. 

However, as it stands, the writing starts off great and then plummets downhill as the story progresses. Wrong usage of verb conjugations, wrong you/your/you're, word structure that seems off or makes little sense, etc. 

It also feels that half my choices do not matter as the story progresses the same disregarding wether or not you even asked a question or if you actually responded emotionally or not. 

I think this story would REALLY benefit from another look over and perhaps a beta reader or three that are fluent in english to smooth out some kinks. 

this was legit the CUTEST thing ever.

so excited to see the new scenes, very interested in June's upcoming little one-on-one ehehe good job all!

oooh amazinnnnn!!!

Man i restarted my 4th playthrough, and i'm wondering if there will ever be a plan to perhaps bring this out on mobile? i'd love to just play this in my bed hahaha

legit reminded me to go grab my water bottle i forgot in the kitchen LOL

omg that's so SOON, i'm so excited to once again go through all the heartache <3
can't wait for the consequences to my actions to slap me in the face...

My god reading this fully with the update is a ROLLERCOASTER, I have been screaming at my screen and loving needling Vicente so much. 

But the choice between Vicente and Tellus... I am going to be in SO MUCH TROUBLE.

yo I am 5 minutes in and I'm looking this up because why was the mic placing attractive?? T_T

Glad my comment didn't discourage you, because I have been thinking about this every other day. The writing definitely feels unique and I truly hope you manage to bring your particular flair to the rest of what you want to write :)

As a fellow non-native english speaker, I get it. Sometimes words simply don't look right even when they are. 

Binged all of these back to back. This is probably one of my favourite smutty If's now. dang Flea. 

Loving the worldbuilding as well honestly, can't wait for the switch of us saving flea from himself to flea saving us from ourselves (because my mc is not doing too hot in her pigsty and her obsession LOL)

This was a very interesting premise so far, but definitely needs another read-over or two for the grammatical errors I encountered. Some sentences make little sense and some sentence structures get used wrong - which happens to the best of us. 

Definitely not to the point of not recommending this however, it's an incredibly interesting world. Gritty, dirty, more than a little deranged -- looking at you Maud. So far Having only met Ace, I can already tell this character will be my downfall, the realistic hopeful to my pessimistic cynic. It will be grand. 

[Incredibly excited for future updates because I WILL be following this like a hawk]

Maud is concerningly well written for a crazy person LOL

I may or may not have screamed in excitement, I am so thrilled to read this chapter

I have been heavily breathing and frothing at the mouth since I woke up. LOL

Finally got around to playing this, and I can proudly add another fictional man onto my list of things to drool over. And I don't even have a name LOL

Loved the little tidbits of sql as well (and the arnoldc - that was a rabbit hole) 

the writing is so endearing and I got to give props to the phenomenal VA, cause WOW.

actually so good and fun, made me smile and laugh out loud!

Loving the demo, such a fun concept! 

Once question however, it states the demo has 2 endings; and 2 cg's.

I however can only get the breakup ending and am unsure how to get the other one? I have gotten the bar fully down but it only ends with the to be continued (or IS this the second ending and am i being slow? xD)

actually ridiculously good, came here for short nsfw fun and now I'm super invested in the story and world. (and mostly egon and rylan lets be honest)

also wondering about this, i went back because i thought finalizing the second floor quest would lock me out of finding him. might be the quest isnt completed or you need to not work with bugguy (i sided with garth -> bug dude)

any clue yet?