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I don't think its just translation because when translating, AIs usually copy the writer's style. If not asked for rephrasing too, in which case I consider it AI written.

The game is solid. The renders are really good, and so are the animations.

BUT
Most (like 90%) of the dialogue is very clearly AI-written. It is really, really easy to tell. And that makes the writing bland. The characters, ironically, have no character, they all talk the same way, use same idioms, same sentence structures, same in this game and same in many others. I admit, writing is really hard, so I can't really criticize anyone for using it, but it is really annoying, and makes me not want to read further. Even just bringing the percentage down to below 50% should make a great difference.

For example:

- Delete all of the M dashes. Those double long hyphens. Only AI uses them, and its the first sign I look for. Shuffle around the words a little bit, and use commas. VSC can easily replace all of them in a single second, so that's not much work.

- Replace these obviously AI  written "lists of words", like "Quick. Quiet. Highly professional.". Only AI does that. But it always does that, so it is very clear that that dialogue was written by it. You could extend it to multiple sentences, like "We must do this quickly. We have to be quiet,  no fooling around, because this is serious matter." or something. See? Much better! And we increased the word count!

- Sometimes AI likes to leave out pronouns and linking words.. There are like two examples of this in the game that I noticed, one of them when the MC enters the pod. Yes, people do leave out pronouns as slang but AI does it a very unusual way, which makes it easy to notice. For example, AI would write my previous sentence without "which", like this:" Very unusual way. Makes it easy to notice." See, how it uses a full stop instead of a comma? And erases the linking word. These are hard to notice at first glance but very easy to notice as a reader.

Honestly, if there is no Maid and Butler dialogue, even messy human made writing would be better. Trust me, AI makes it worse, because it removes the personality of both the writer and the characters, and makes it generic.

If you take a bit of time to rewrite these sentences, and avoid using AI to write (or rewrite) your sentences, this very well could be a great AVN. I know the temptation, I've used AI to wrote me a story once, but I scrapped it, and I'm glad I did, because it made the product no longer mine. Take this as an advice from a friendly want-to-be-developer.

most probably not

Thanks man! That is aweseom!

But the github** seems to be down, it gives me a 404 error

yooo this is solid news! I'm kinda interested in the backwards workflow of HS2 -> Blender. Is it gonna be rendered in blender or just bgs? If the 1st, may I ask how you do that? SN2 stops me from making my own game.

yo man you are in like every devlog comment section ever, nice collection though, thats where I found this gem

Hell yeah! We ain't need 'em

meh brat vs tsundere its all the same, I hate them

It's fine! I understand that an update can take a lot of time, I was just confused (and worried a bit) because there were no updates at all. It's great that it's alive!

This was fun! Ended a bit suddenly so that was a bit meh but so far I had fun.
Seeing as there are no updates on patreon, I hope this is not abandoned.

Thanks for the consideration 😊

The game is interesting and the models look nice.

But please make the bonus scenes non-canon! I understand that they will be free the next update, but still. It feels like something the game already had being cut out instead of it having bonus content. But if you want to keep them, then make them non-canon, as does Isekai Paradise, meaning that these scenes are not connected to the story but scenes that would be understandable by themselves and are not mentioned ever.

no problem!

There is no release date yet, but the dev said 5 days ago that the update is 70-75% done (on patreon)

Though I must add that turn based combat is really not something that interests me

Thanks man! This now definitely will keep my attention

To be honest I did not play nor watch any content regarding Exp 33 so I have no idea how much this is inspired by it, but the overall concept seems interesting.

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As the post-content note says, the next update will clear up who the mc is. This is fine. But I still feel that there is so little we know about him. There are hints that the family is not his biological one, pretty clear hints, but they are easy to miss, and many players (definitely me including) honestly do hate actual in*est, so please before starting an actual relationship b/w MC and the blonde girl, please clear up their actual current relationship.

Also we know almost nothing about the other two girls mentioned? Sure they are supposed to be friends, but nothing more than that, and they only have one scene for now.

Personally, if you can manage it I'd also like a characters screen in the future.

These are my problems/suggestions. The game otherwise is interesting, if the first one is solved I will return for sure.

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This is kinda good.

Though there is one thing that I personally don't like that has no connection to how good the story is but I'll tell it anyway:
- I hate tsunderes. No matter if it's light or full on crazy. Therefore, both Carla and that ai pisses me the fuck off

anyway, story is interesting, the animations are good, if we overlook those two its 8/10

I don't really like mega because it has a download speed limit that can't be bypassed by FDM. Can't speak for others though. Gofile's and Pixeldrain's CAN be bypassed, so personally I prefer them

thanks!

I think it's a bug, but the game uses more than 50% of my (pretty good) CPU in the main menu WHILE IDLE. 

There are quite a few bugs. For one, I cant event open the girls menu, it just gives an error and I have to rollback. The second, some images are missing, like when you unlock the nurse girl her "hover" image is just gone. Please fix maybe?

You can't from the itch app. It happens, you just have to download from the browser instead. If you can, use a download manager to bypass download limits.

I agree with what you said about Lym. I also expected her to be someone who supports us no matter what, who is the pinnacle of trustable character, and even someone with who you can make jokes and just have a fun time. It really was a cold ass shower seeing her being so indecisive towards her own BEST FRIEND who she clearly loves based on the narrative.  I get that she gets jealous, that's fine, but the game doesn't give you even the OPTION to console her. Your dialogue options don't matter most of the time, because the response dialogue is the same almost every time, and if you play the VN mode (like I did), you don't really get any feedback between choosing the sweet option, the understanding option, or the absolute dogshit option. It makes you feel... not powerless, but out of control, and not for the better of the story.

Also like I know that there is this difficult time between the two characters, fine, relationship development maybe, but then why does the game throw us into a random sex scene with her? It does nothing other than serve the AVN title, does not in any way change their relationship neither for the better or for the worse.  Instead of those, I'd much prefer if her events were about them mending their relationship in some way or another.  But no, they have a weird sex scene where they ignore the plot, or their relationship of that time, like it never happened, and that scene will be forgot the next time they talk about like nothing happened and they still (almost) hate each other.

Yeah, rant time over.

TLDR: I agree with what you said about Lym, 100%.

I've put this game on the "wait for next update" list when I saw it was only the prologue. Well, I've read it and I can say that the prologue is much longer which I appreciate. The MC is likeable, and so are the LIs. Good game, interesting concept, can't wait for more.

Adding this to the "Big Shots" collection of mine. (Also, take my 5 star rating, you deserve it)

Happy to help :D

I'm making an educated guess here, but I'm pretty sure the new update is really close. If we assume KS started working right after 0.3 became public, then between that date and the last public patreon update (11 Oct) was a timespan of 286 days. Assuming linear development (which is not as he mentioned in his last public post), if we divide the then progress percentage (90) by the days we had for that timespan, we get roughly 0.31468531468%/day. Multiply it by the days since that update (54) and we get 16.9930069927. Again assuming linear development, it should have been already done (90%+16.9930069927% = 106.99%). Which it is not, and that's fair, but it could mean the update will be done in the following days, probably even this week.

Don't count too much on it though, as development can run into obstacles at any point for any amount of time.

Hope this helps XD

these types of games don't usually need skillful 3D modelling. Characters are made by literally adjusting sliders inside a program, and can be easily imported int o the render engine. Of course, you can always *make* your own models, but the community is so extensive that it's really easy to find models, maps that are similar to what  you need.

I'm not putting down the work behind these games, because I know how difficult can storytelling and posing be, but modelling knowledge/skills are not neccessary at all.

it is just SFW season 1

This game is so good, and the updates are consistently fast and pretty big, thank you!

The most likely reason for why you experience this is that you lacked like 1 relationship point with her. I chose Alex every time in my playthroughs and I never missed Dalia's route. Maybe you made other choices that didn't give you enough points with her. There supposedly are "silent point"-s that don't make the heartbeat sound or make the icon glow.

on discord he posted yesterday that 0.9 is about 68% done. So more than half of the update is done, so it could be around december, but this is a very rough estimate

The story seems very interesting, but I do have one or two major complaints: the story isn't explained properly most of the time. A lot of lore and worldbuilding is missing, for example at the very beginning after meeting Strea, those several days spent with her are shown only in a few frames which isn't in itself a problem but here it skips a lot of potential relationship development. They go from strangers to friends in what from our POV, is an instant. And there are a LOT of these skips. During the MC's recovery he talks about a lot of things happening, yet we don't see any of them. There are also hints to a lot of stuff which to the characters are basic knowledge but to us readers, it isn't. This overall makes the story a bit confusing, and hard to grasp. The characters in general are also not explained well enough. Like the two girls near the end just appear out of nowhere, find the MC creepy and then he chases them for no apparent reason whatsoever. Also Strea's ability to change her boob size is not explained at all, the MC takes it as something that happens every day. (it might be normal in their world, but then let it be explained in a thought of the MC or something similar, or a lore book where we can read some details about the world that are not explained well in the dialogue itself.)

But if these problems are fixed, I think this story has a lot of potential, and I'll definitely be watching out for this game and waiting for future updates.

The story and characters are incredible, 10/10

According to berkili4's discord post, it's the same story and the same options, but all NSFW stuff are removed. The point of this sort of reupload is to make the game visible and thus to new players to be able to discover the game which may later increase the amount of patreon supporters of the game.

Wow. I don't have other words  to describe this masterpiece. Even though it's only ep2 it took me like 9 hours to read and this gives a lot of room for relationship progression which you can very much take advantage of. I like that!

this game is fire! It has funny moments, an interesting story, good visuals. Can't wait for more!

same bro, same, it is very annoying

This game is... wow. The story is grounded and realistic, yet not in any way boring. The characters feel real, each with their own struggles and personalities, which a lot of these types of games lack. I'm glad I discovered this gem. (Zoe is my favourite)