There’s so much worldbuilding packed into this, and the ending with the destruction of the diamond sounds like it could be really cool to run!

Running the Fallen City is clever, would be cool to see the Foundry Points expanded on but that is some easy prep for a Warden. I might suggest using a different color for the hyperlinks, the green on black was just a little hard to read. Otherwise, the graphic design is really beautiful. The choices for images were perfect. Very well-written, good premise and I like how it unfolds.

The visual design brings out a great atmosphere, almost newspaper-like (especially at the start, where that works really well). I really like your overland adventure content, but think it would really benefit from an expansion to flesh out the foundry / city of the dead. Great work :)

I love how you combine the shape  of a diamond and the cover. I also love that you edit the tables so it looks like tables from old printing machine also, and I also like how Matea can be reasoned with, and she appears early, it gives the PCs opportunity to know more of her motive. 

Glad someone else had the clever idea repurposing Weird Tales art and making it work so well!

Looking forward to the thrilling conclusion!

I never cease to be amazed by how much information some of you manage to pack into four pages without compromising the presentation. I really like the adventure, the way you encourage exploration through the search for the Foundry and the variety of possible outcomes at the end. Plus, I think including ads for the sequels is very clever and gives the adventure a bit of a magazine feel. Great job.

Impressive adventure, so many outcomes. 

Impressive adventure, so many outcomes. 

Amazing atmosphere throughout, and great use of visuals! I especially liked the illustrations from Weird Tales.

Cover: An arresting cover that ticks the Appendix N boxes: a haunting oil-painted portrait, fonts that scream 1970s and distressed paperback look, as if you had just picked it off the pulp fantasy shelf in your local second-hand bookshop.

Interior art: Weird Tales pencil artwork works very well.

Interior layout: I like the limited choice of colour palette, it’s a case of less is more. The green bars on the table are lighter than the green used for the bold text and on the map, maybe it would look better if they were all the same shade? Though the dark green/black combo is harder to read so maybe not.

The columned text layout is for the most part attractive and easy to read. Just a few places where the text bumps up against the table and artwork could do with more space to breathe.

The Adventure: Nice concept and outline, with a lot of potential for role-playing, investigation and negotiation. Due to the space constraints imposed by this jam, the GM will have to put in some time fleshing out the details (or be good at improvising). Given the space constraints, I wonder if the table of terrain types and distances is a good use of space. I think if I was running this I would be inclined to hand-wave the moving from location to location and focus on the political and personal interactions.

Nice work, very pretty!

Like a diamond, I can feel sparkles of genius within this adventure! It feels like a negadungeon but with a larger scope.

Solid entry, well laid-out, great choice in art. I’m curious to see more of Matea, and characterize her! What secrets did Bartolo think he uncovered? I think there’s lots of room to expand this adventure; it begets curiosity! <3

To me, this one could be a pulp novel that you find in an unorganized used book store. The themes come through very strongly!

I feel like there's a lot of work a GM would want to to do flesh out the towns,  but I really liked the mix-and-match encounter tables, that's something that would work immediately from the get-go. 

Great design! 

Great factions, moral ambiguity and twist. Dig the design. Would love to play this.