The boldest entry of them all. I cannot see me play this stuff under any condition, but i wish i had the design grit of its author.

That’s a hard title, as it more or less commands to come up with a list of 12 somethings that in turn take a lot of room on the pages. The setup is great and I would argue one should just play the torments in the order as written. In a list so big not everything can be a banger, but there’s more good stuff than meh-stuff. I would have preferred if the torments were all set on the station, as it is said that the players unbeknowingly work towards the completion of Mother.

Absolutely inspired and so unabashedly confident, so fun to read and have me so many ideas. 

What I thought worked well

• It has heart and creativity. So many ideas that it's enough to make a full campaign out of. 
• I like the Android concept and that it does give agency. 
• I love how a side quest can also be the ending
• I like the way some random events connect and how is works

What I thought could be improved

• A lot of ideas but could do with some editing. Sometimes less is more, and i would have preferred some ideas be more fleshed out. The GM has to do a lot still. 
• A few more mechanics could help, especially around the mother. I know there's a spear and healing mechanic but that's not where the mother is mentioned for example

Would benefit a lot from a better, more intentional layout and editing, since the cover is already charming and the overall concept is pretty cool

You have a really distinct voice in your writing, I particularly like the phrase "meat-made enemies." Keep using really specific, evocative phrases like that in your future projects! Well done!

very cool art cover I love this! The concept is good and executed well enough! Layout I feel like it should be double column format but I’m ok with it. Like the one  comment  said.  Do check out all of the other submissions for inspiration on layout for next adventure. Keep it up!

I like the meat-made. I think the focus for your next adventure should be layout, double column format would do wonders for readability, and clarity of vision and how that information is delivered so the reader has a clear picture of the adventure. When the jam is done, read through the highest rated entries for inspiration. All in all, keep it up!

Frozen blood being used as coolant for a killer, meat killing Ai…this game is so gnarly, I love it. Keep up the good work. 

This is really creative! Amazing science-fantasy vibes. 

The art is really great!! Love to see handmade art. 

Love this Cover! Interesting extrapolations, and clearly formatted writing. Noice!