Thank you for the detailed feedback and for taking the time to read my work
I would gladly chat more about the translation process on Discord. For anyone else reading the comments, I’d like to share a little behind the scenes context about this project.
English is not my native language. I had to choose between submitting the original French version (and forcing the judges to use translators) or translating it myself and fixing what I could. Because I am limited by my English vocabulary, it was incredibly difficult to capture the emotion and poetic flow of my original French text.
Regarding the medium: my strength is writing, not art or music. Text asks for a lot more time and investment from a reviewer than listening to a song or looking at an image. I actually reached out on Discord to see if any artists or musicians wanted to collaborate with me to build on my universe, but unfortunately, I didn't get any responses. Since I had to go solo, the project was limited to my specific skillset.
Because of that, I also had to limit the scope of the story. Some parts had to be sped up and the ending is a bit rushed, but I felt that 20+ pages of text was already the absolute maximum I could politely ask someone to read for the game jam.
While I understand the critique about the lack of different media, it is incredibly difficult for solo creators to provide a multimedia experience without a team, and I imagine many of the textual projects in this jam suffered the same fate.
Thank you again for the fair scores on the atmosphere and theme, and I look forward to chatting on Discord :) Note : In my free time, I actually worked on some AI-generated concept art for myself, because I plan to expand this universe and already have many ideas for both a prequel and a sequel. I would gladly share these images with you after the jam to show the kind of visual vision I had for my work—starting with the Fides flower, the Mater Natura, the Forest-Walkers, and various other characters and scenes.