This demo was really enjoyable, and I think I'd agree with the other comment that it feels like a high quality audiobook. I really REALLY want to see this piece be successful so this comment will contain quite a bit of unsolicited advice (sorry).
What I really liked:
- UI design, art, and presentation: This VN is stunning and I mean it. The layout of things, the accessibility of things and the overall design is amazing and highly polished.
- Voice acting and sfx: The voice acting really brought this experience to life. The variety in accents is great, and the background noises really put me in that space
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What I think would add to the experience:
- More showing and less telling: I think why this reminded me more of an audiobook than a typical visual novel is because the narrator genuinely is doing so much of the heavy lifting. I don't mind his smooth voice but it does lean heavier into the novel than the visual. Like when it was describing what Avorad was handing to Ilona, I don't mind having the narrator tell me about it, but I'd also like to see a visual of it! I'm pretty sure this is limited due to time constraints of the jam but I hope this is something you'd consider for the full game
- Maybe a shorter intro/reshuffling of events: This is completely a personal preference thing but I found the intro at the cafeteria a bit too long. I think it's important for world building and to show people more of MC's backstory but I don't think I was "deep enough" into the experience yet to pay attention to all the details given at that point. Again you might want other people's opinion on this!
Great job nonetheless, looking forward to the full game!