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I played the free island twice, once to a win (110 s) and once letting it fail. The look is the best thing here: cream paper, contour lines, hand-inked labels for the hill, the vale and the cove. Hold to scoop and hold to pour is easy to pick up. The hints walk you through sand, then water, then lava at a good pace, and the status line that tells you when a path is blocked by water or lava is genuinely useful.

Things I hit. In the first few seconds an ad panel appeared on the right and the whole island shrank and shifted while I was reaching for the circled sand, so my first press missed. Reserving the ad space from the start would stop that jump.

I read all four routes, both first choices and both second choices. The premise lands fast: a box labeled TOMORROW, a returns clerk, and a customer afraid of their first greeting. My favorite details were the form where the erased reason rises back up, the counter bell turning into a school bell for the test run, Rina turning her badge around, the customer stumbling and correcting the greeting, and a receipt that stamps only the first attempt as done. That last one is a great quiet beat.

On the feedback side, the first choice (listen or read the form) changes one middle scene and a line or two of the ending, so four routes felt like two. Both endings are warm, so I never felt a choice could cost anything. One option that leaves something unresolved would add tension. Rina explains both second-choice options in one dense paragraph before you pick, so I chose from a summary.

A couple of lines tripped me up. One is the line about the scale having a different customer-service policy, right after the knocking. The other is the question about needing more than a minute before closing, in the five-minutes ending. The ending title is small gray text and easy to miss. A small “ending 1 of 2” marker would nudge people to try the other.

I played this twice and got two endings.  The title card’s two-weeks-then-two-weeks line sold me right away, and the trades are sharp: “It’s your back against their morning. That’s the whole trade.” My favorite part is act two, where you become the incoming keeper and the hut is built from what you did. A warm stove and chocolate left out in one run, a cold stove and a bare shelf in the other, and I felt my own choices. I also liked that the selfish run isn’t scolded, and that you can still put your own chocolate out when you arrive to nothing.

Two small things. After an ending there are no buttons, so I had to reload to play again. A Play again button would help, since the page invites a second run. The five dots in the top left aren’t labeled. I couldn’t tell if they were progress or endings, and I only found two.

The bigger thought is that nothing limited me, so being generous cost nothing and the choices were moral rather than costly. If you could only do three of the five before the light goes, the handover would hurt more. Wind comes up a few times but there’s no sound at all. That may be deliberate, though a very quiet wind bed could be lovely.

Nice work with Coalheart! The art is the standout for me. The pixel work, the torchlight vignette and the face that looks confused when you bump something solid all have real charm. One idea per room teaches well, the over-par note hinting at a shorter route makes me want another go, and free undo and restart are exactly right.

A few things I noticed. The room is drawn small in the middle of a big empty canvas, about a third of my window width, so the tiles were tiny. Par counts every step including walking, and I finished First Ember at 13 vs 11 and Two Runes at 20 vs 18. The early rooms felt more like tracing a route than solving something. I wondered if par could count only bumps. In room 1 I got stuck because I didn’t realize an empty torch tile is solid and blocks the path, so a small visual cue would help. Rooms unlock strictly in order, so a skip or a hint after a few restarts could rescue people who stall.

Thanks for the detailed feedback! I made the fixes and adjusted the wording for now while I explore hosting a server.