Interesting pitch, could have been developed further in so many directions. This needs to commit itself in one direction and go for it. With a proper finish work and a less striaghtforward map it could be grest.
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Some really interesting ideas that could lead to great roleplaying moments! The bog body is such a simple but evocative NPC encounter. I don’t know what strange things would happen if it gets the glasses, though 👀
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Dance with Danger [Shadowdark]They main thing that comes to mind when reading this is: potential. It reads like a strong idea, that needs to be explored further. You clearly put a lot of energy into this cabinet of curiosities -the rooms, the table. It leaks creativity. The story itself, who lost what, what did they *got, what have they lost, what’s going on in town with that ooze, has to be described al lot more.
By now it’s a strange and intriguing location. But it could be much more.
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The Prison of the Star SovereignOverall, I love this location. I will likely use this at my table. You've got some great ideas.
You mention arcane residue a lot, but I seem not to be able to find what it does, which is a problem when the painting defends itself by shooting arcane residue and the oozes collapse into it.
As others have mentioned, your layout could use some small adjustments. You have a lot of awkward white space which could have been filled by adjusting the text or adding small pieces of art.
I think your creatures are very evocative, and with your descriptions, I think many GMs could adapt them to a system of their choice.
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Mac Cumhaill's Knot Appx NThere's room to grow into formatting and layout but it's clear that you've been playing and/or reading the material of this great big hobby of ours. Please keep writing! This is the kind of completeness that turns out great modules. I hope you got to playtest this because it's pretty cool!
Just the way you described the arcane ooze reminds me to always keep the prose evocative, even with simple descriptions of a creature.
"It flows against gravity, squeezes through cracks, and leaves smoking magic in its wake."
It sure does!
The evocative writing and descriptions here are really excellent. You've done a wonderful job targeting all that detail directly at your core conceit too, which makes it all very effective at the table (I suspect).
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The Quest for Koschel's Death
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