do check my group's in your free time
/jam/brackeys-16/rate/4953499
I checked out your game and left a comment and rating. I like many others seemed drawn to it even though VN is not the typical style of game I enjoy.
Check mine out if you get the chance:
Do note that it does require multiplayer, at least one other player should give you a good idea but 3 or more for best experience.
I played your game and here's my comments, I tried commenting on the game itself but itch won't let me because it says I'm posting too much so I'm trying here:
This was a really interesting read, I appreciated the artwork accompanying things. I also liked that it was easy to tell what was going on with all the clues and conversations you could gather. I found a couple of typos, don't know if you want to fix them but they are in these two sentences:
"Elaborate potions for important matters? The picture of some powerful or dangerous concoctions flashses in your mind. Judging from the state of the bottles that were all knocked over, what if there was an important matter that the grand wizard had to immediately attend to?"
"You approach Magnus, the mayor of Crann. He must be desperate to travel this far to help with the investigation, you think to youself. Wizard Alasdair must help him and his townspeople a lot judging from the crowd waiting for the grand wizard in front of the tower."
Good job on writing this, it was an interesting world and made me want to travel there.
And of course here's mine if you got time to try it.
Do note that it does require multiplayer, at least one other player should give you a good idea but 3 or more for best experience.
filethirteen here from our team account because itch is rate limiting me
I dunno if we're past it already but there was a 48 hour period where you could fix bugs and add additional platform support. I personally have some stuff I'm waiting for the voting period to end to add to my own game, because I don't think any of my stuff counts as bug fix or additional platform support, it's recommendations on stuff that would make the game nicer.
filethirteen here from our team account because itch is rate limiting me:
This game was generally quite polished. A lot of little things like transitions and stuff jumped out at me. I was wondering what the box of batteries was for. I think some of the writing could use improvement but it was interesting to see everything. I kept playing because I was really interested in the world and characters you created. I feel like some of the gameplay could be polished further like modifying the hitbox on the phone so you can't accidentally look through the gap. I unfortunately didn't score high enough on the dart section and died haha. I also felt like the information in the tablet was a little hard to understand the meaning, and some of the writing felt a bit immature in some ways even though the themes were kinda heavy. Good job on this one. If you have a chance check mine out too:
Do note that it does require multiplayer, at least one other player should give you a good idea but 3 or more for best experience.
